Editing

Quick review from yesterday:

When you revise, do you use ARMS or CUPS?

"OUR TEACHERS MAKE A DIFFERANCE"

What part of CUPS should we use to correct the sign?

"Let's eat Grandma" -> "Let's eat, Grandma" is an example of what part of CUPS?

"what's the name of the boat in the titanic?"

What part of CUPS should we use to correct the tweet?

Have I Made a Mistake?

(1) I consider for a moment whether getting on the roller coaster at the carnival was a good life choice but the sudden forward movement of the ride made me see that it’s way too late for second-guessing. (2) My sweaty toes are clenched inside my black-and-white tennis shoes. (3) I glance at my hands and notice that my knuckles have turned white. (4) I decided that perhaps i should loosen my grip on the heavy bar that’s pressing against my chest. (5) My hands aren’t intrested in what my brain is telling them to do.

**What change should be made in sentence 4?

Have I Made a Mistake?

(1) I consider for a moment whether getting on the roller coaster at the carnival was a good life choice but the sudden forward movement of the ride made me see that it’s way too late for second-guessing. (2) My sweaty toes are clenched inside my black-and-white tennis shoes. (3) I glance at my hands and notice that my knuckles have turned white. (4) I decide that perhaps i should loosen my grip on the heavy bar that’s pressing against my chest. (5) My hands aren’t intrested in what my brain is telling them to do.

**The meaning of sentence 1 can be clarified by changing made to —

Have I Made a Mistake?

(1) I consider for a moment whether getting on the roller coaster at the carnival was a good life choice; but the sudden forward movement of the ride made me see that it’s way too late for second-guessing. (2) My sweaty toes are clenched inside my black-and-white tennis shoes. (3) I glance at my hands and notice that my knuckles have turned white. (4) I decide that perhaps i should loosen my grip on the heavy bar that’s pressing against my chest. (5) My hands aren’t intrested in what my brain is telling them to do.

**What change needs to be made to sentence 1?