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Conclusion

Forty years ago, many Hong Kongers wanted to be singers.

At that time, Hong Kong had a thriving arts scene and you could become rich by being a singer just like stars like Anita Mui.

However, nowadays, not many young people in Hong Kong want to be a singer and instead prefer other careers such as being a Youtuber or an influencer.

There are a number of reasons for this, but chief among them are that singing is not a stable job, Hong Kong does not have enough music venues, and young Hong Kongers most focus on their studies.

Firstly, one problem with Cantopop is that there are nowhere near as many bands as there are with K-pop.

This is because K-pop bands have support from rich companies who launch their careers, but in Hong Kong, there is very little money available to become famous.

For example, BlackPink was made by YG Entertainment and YG Entertainment are very rich, so it could pay for BlackPink concerts.

Furthermore, K-pop has more genres and therefore whatever your music taste is, you can find some music you like in K-pop.

As a result, young people in Hong Kong like K-pop more than Cantopop because they can find something they like.

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