Comment #1

Plagiarism​

Comment #2

Thesis statement

• ​Incomplete thesis statement (I believe that community engagement activity should be made compulsory). --> where are the reasons?

• No thesis statement

• Unclear stance ​

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Comment #3

Topic sentence

• Wrongly placed (as 2nd or 3rd sentence in a body paragraph)

• ​No stance in the topic sentence. (It can be done, but sometimes, you have to)

Comment #4

Explanation (in body paragraph)

• No example (community engagement can build one's reputation and experience.)

• ​Irrelevant points (community engagement activity releases stress- example looking at homeless people)

Comment #5

Concluding sentence (in body paragraph)

• No concluding sentence

• ​The concluding sentence point is different from the one in topic sentence

• Similar sentence structure with topic sentence​

Comment #5

Concluding sentence (in body paragraph)

• No concluding sentence

• ​The concluding sentence point is different from the one in topic sentence

• Similar sentence structure with topic sentence​

Comment #6

Concluding paragraph

• No restatement of the thesis statement​

• No recommendation​