The Revision Process

​Where does second person writing work best?

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​Are footnotes effective?

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​What does making the mandu represent for the narrator?

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​Do you have any special traditions in your family?

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​The ten senses.

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​You will practice writing with sensory detail on the next slide.

• ​Tell when the reader NEEDS information, show to bring the story to life.

• One of the best ways to  showinstead of tell is the “rule of three method.”

• ​It usually just means listing three items, using specific examples, and detailing moments of your story. 

• ​See the example on the right. 

From Practical Arguments: 

I was an impatient child who disliked obstructions: traffic jams, clogged bathtub drains, catsup bottles you had to bang. I liked to drop twigs into the stream that ran through our backyard, and watch them float downstream, coaxed around rocks and branches by the distant pull of the ocean. If they hit a snag I freed them.”

​When we edit we use CUPS

​When we revise we use arms.

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​What do you notice are the differences between the two?

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​Once we complete the personal narrative we are going into Unit 2: The Rhetorical Analysis.

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