narrative writing

Best way to express: I yelled to Rags, "Get out of Grandma Boland's lilies!"

Best way to express: "We need to start down by the lake," I said.

BEST way to express: "Ok, go get him, but hurry!" I told Martha Faye.

Best way to express: "Go ahead and bring those lily bulbs with you, too," as we loaded the silver into the truck.

Best way to express: "Gram, what about Grandpa's supper?"

Best introduction: BANG! The screen door slammed shut as I ran outside yelling at that mutt to get out of the lilies.

Best conclusion: As I fell asleep, I realized I shouldn't have been so hard on that dog. Maybe that good for nothing dog is good for something after all. Now I wonder, what will I do to occupy my time?

Restatement of text evidence: By the time I fastened my seat belt, Gram had started the silver story. I could repeat it, but she never uses the same number of 'greats' for Grandma Boland. I don't ask anymore, but she tells it anyway.

Progression of ideas: Once I loaded the metal detector, we were off. Just when I finished the family legend, we arrived at the woods. After looking at the map, I told Martha Faye we'd begin the search at the lake.

Progression of ideas: As the sun set, I told Martha Faye it was time to go. We made our way to the truck to cook supper.